I like all of your edits Mark. *From:* Mark Svancarek [mailto:marksv@microsoft.com] *Sent:* Monday, October 05, 2015 6:48 PM *To:* Ram Mohan <rmohan@afilias.info>; Don Hollander < don.hollander@icann.org>; Tan Tanaka, Dennis <dtantanaka@verisign.com>; Brent London <brentlondon@google.com>; Carolyn Nguyen (LCA) < Carolyn.Nguyen@microsoft.com>; Christian Dawson <dawson@i2coalition.com>; Richard Merdinger <rmerdinger@godaddy.com>; kurt@kjpritz.com; judy.song@neustar.biz *Cc:* UA-discuss@icann.org *Subject:* RE: UA Fact Sheet I’ve added more updates. *From:* Ram Mohan [mailto:rmohan@afilias.info <rmohan@afilias.info>] *Sent:* Monday, October 5, 2015 1:44 PM *To:* Mark Svancarek; Don Hollander; Tan Tanaka, Dennis; Brent London; Carolyn Nguyen (LCA); Christian Dawson; Richard Merdinger; kurt@kjpritz.com; judy.song@neustar.biz *Cc:* UA-discuss@icann.org *Subject:* RE: UA Fact Sheet I made extensive edits on top of Mark’s changes. I’m cc’ing the full UASG distro, it’s useful to get more eyes on this. -Ram ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Ram Mohan o: +1.215.706.5700 x103; m: +1.215.431.0958; f: +1.215.706.5701 Skype: gliderpilot30 *From:* Mark Svancarek [mailto:marksv@microsoft.com] *Sent:* Monday, October 05, 2015 1:00 PM *To:* Don Hollander <don.hollander@icann.org>; Ram Mohan < rmohan@afilias.info>; Tan Tanaka, Dennis <dtantanaka@verisign.com>; Brent London <brentlondon@google.com>; Carolyn Nguyen (LCA) < Carolyn.Nguyen@microsoft.com>; Christian Dawson <dawson@i2coalition.com>; Richard Merdinger <rmerdinger@godaddy.com>; kurt@kjpritz.com; judy.song@neustar.biz *Subject:* RE: UA Fact Sheet My edits and comments are in the document. I’m not seeing my own redlining, so hopefully y’all will be able to see what I changed. I do think it’s clear enough right now [as edited by me ;-) ]. /marksv *From:* Don Hollander [mailto:don.hollander@icann.org <don.hollander@icann.org>] *Sent:* Monday, October 5, 2015 12:08 AM *To:* Ram Mohan; Tan Tanaka, Dennis; Brent London; Carolyn Nguyen (LCA); Mark Svancarek; Christian Dawson; Richard Merdinger; kurt@kjpritz.com; judy.song@neustar.biz *Subject:* UA Fact Sheet https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a_Agj-CLwM3E0CU-D2tKYCUPtPvNKKvIDKp3fle6... <https://na01.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3a%2f%2fdocs.google...> The above link refers. We have been working to get this document ready for some weeks now. We took the original text that was used during the ICANN meeting in Toronto and have been massaging it. There’s still no clarity and precious little time left to a) format it and b) print it. But, I think it may still be possible. Your prompt review and, if necessary, revision would be very welcome. Once this is done, then we can also work to get it prepared for the IGF - including getting some translation done. Thanks so much. Don PS: This distribution list includes those who have contributed comments as well as those who volunteered to review UASG documentation.