Hi Silvia,  It looks pretty good to me.  My only note would be that the Appendix cites Sebastian's presentation, but appears not to have a link to it.  Please express my thanks to whoever added the initial boilerplate.  Bill Jouris   Sent from Yahoo Mail on Android On Thu, Nov 16, 2023 at 4:28 PM, Silvia Vivanco<silvia.vivanco@icann.org> wrote: Dear all,   Thank you for your edits to the document, with your approval, staff will close the document for edits and will prepare the final submission, including the PPT.   The vote will be launched tomorrow Friday 17 November.   Kind regards,   Silvia       From: Silvia Vivanco <silvia.vivanco@icann.org> Date: Thursday, November 16, 2023 at 10:26 AM To: Bill Jouris <b_jouris@yahoo.com>, OFB-WG <ofb-wg@icann.org> Cc: Jonathan Zuck <jzuck@innovatorsnetwork.org>, Ricardo Holmquist <rihogris@gmail.com>, Cheryl Langdon-Orr <langdonorr@gmail.com>, DANIEL NANGHAKA <dndannang@gmail.com>, Claire Craig <claireccraig@gmail.com>, Vanda Scartezini <vanda@scartezini.org>, "sebastien@bachollet.com" <sebastien@bachollet.com>, At-Large Staff <staff@atlarge.icann.org> Subject: Re: [Ext] Re: ACTION: 24 HR comment period 16 November 23:59 UTC - Pilot Holistic Review TOR   Dear bill,   Yes, it is easier to send 2 documents and reference the PPT as an Annex.   Thank you very much for your feedback!   Silvia     From: Bill Jouris <b_jouris@yahoo.com> Reply-To: Bill Jouris <b_jouris@yahoo.com> Date: Wednesday, November 15, 2023 at 8:15 PM To: Silvia Vivanco <silvia.vivanco@icann.org>, OFB-WG <ofb-wg@icann.org> Cc: Jonathan Zuck <jzuck@innovatorsnetwork.org>, Ricardo Holmquist <rihogris@gmail.com>, Cheryl Langdon-Orr <langdonorr@gmail.com>, DANIEL NANGHAKA <dndannang@gmail.com>, Claire Craig <claireccraig@gmail.com>, Vanda Scartezini <vanda@scartezini.org>, "sebastien@bachollet.com" <sebastien@bachollet.com>, At-Large Staff <staff@atlarge.icann.org> Subject: Re: [Ext] Re: ACTION: 24 HR comment period 16 November 23:59 UTC - Pilot Holistic Review TOR   Hi Silvia,    My inclination is to make it an annex.  But I'm open to arguments, if someone here has a different view on the subject.    Bill  Sent from Yahoo Mail on Android [go.onelink.me]   On Wed, Nov 15, 2023 at 4:07 PM, Silvia Vivanco <silvia.vivanco@icann.org> wrote: Dear Bill,   Do you wish to include the Power point in the same body of the ALAC statement? Or could the PPT sent as an annex to the statement?   Thank you very much! Silvia   From:Bill Jouris <b_jouris@yahoo.com> Date: Wednesday, November 15, 2023 at 7:05 PM To: OFB-WG <ofb-wg@icann.org>, Silvia Vivanco <silvia.vivanco@icann.org> Cc: Jonathan Zuck <jzuck@innovatorsnetwork.org>, Ricardo Holmquist <rihogris@gmail.com>, Cheryl Langdon-Orr <langdonorr@gmail.com>, DANIEL NANGHAKA <dndannang@gmail.com>, Claire Craig <claireccraig@gmail.com>, Vanda Scartezini <vanda@scartezini.org>, "sebastien@bachollet.com" <sebastien@bachollet.com>, At-Large Staff <staff@atlarge.icann.org> Subject: [Ext] Re: ACTION: 24 HR comment period 16 November 23:59 UTC - Pilot Holistic Review TOR   As noted in the document, we are looking to attach a PowerPoint.  Once I figure out how to do that.  For your reference, it is attached here.    Bill Jouris    On Wednesday, November 15, 2023 at 02:07:17 PM PST, Silvia Vivanco <silvia.vivanco@icann.org> wrote:     Dear OFB-WG members,   On behalf of Bill Jouris, penholder for the statement, along with Cheryl Langdon-Orr, Vanda Scartezini, Daniel Nanghaka, and Sebastian Bachollet, please find the link to the final draft of the ALAC Statement on the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference at:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GNGOv6wyAi9shj8hLwisJ2fcelGduDDYIj3EYD75... [docs.google.com].   There will be a 24-hour comment period closing tomorrow, Thursday, 16 November, at 23:59 UTC.   Please add your comments directly to the Google document.    Kind regards,   Silvia   Silvia Vivanco Senior Manager, At-Large Regional Affairs Website: atlarge.icann.org [atlarge.icann.org] Facebook: facebook.com/icannatlarge [facebook.com] Twitter:  @ICANNAtLarge [twitter.com]